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Listen:
I would be lying if I said that I didn't
Think of you every time I close my eyes,
That my mind doesn't wander to thoughts
Of you whenever I'm lonely,
That I don't whisper your name
While I sleep.

Truth be told, I am inevitably in love with you.
In a way that makes my heart skip a beat every time
I see you smile, every time I hear you laugh.
It's the fact that I still get butterflies whenever
You lightly whisper my name in my ear
That lets me know we are something more.

Your body,
Nothing has ever seemed so comforting than
The feeling of your arms wrapped around my waist.
I smile up to you as we share a brief connection of
Soft lips and grazing teeth that makes me swoon.

Listen:
Believe me when I say that I think of you
Every time I close my eyes,
That my mind always wanders to thoughts
Of you when I'm lonely,
That I whisper your name while I sleep.
Believe me when I say that I love you,
That there's nowhere I'd rather be
Than with you.
For Nathan. It's kinda cheesy, but what can I say? :)
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killzonekrissy Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
<3 this is so beautiful! :) and much happier this time! happy endings? maybe? Well-written, as usual! as my last 10 or so posts have all said, lol. I am really incredibly bowled over by your writing style and your blatant honesty. Awesome!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student Writer
:D
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YogaTeacher Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how you did it, but this flows so well and is smooth as chocolate pudding. I tend to skip over doting poems, but you opened this so daringly, and it rode the same wave right till the end. I think it's the simplicity; sometimes you just need straight up honesty in love, and it works.
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killzonekrissy Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
Agreed! :) you said it!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's kinda wonderful and I really like the way you start each stanza with, different and creative!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love that final stanza... and the rest before it... They're not so cheesy as they are mesmerizing.

Because I have such... vivid... ideals when I think about what my dream girl is going to be. (rest assured, I don't do that often, and this is my first time reading this work :P I have no idea who you are and, no, I don't like stalking people... unless they're models, Madonna, thatguywiththeglasses.com, the snoopy experiment, and random stand-up comedians)

Its well written, the detailing :clap: its very well held; couldn't have put it better myself. Well done.
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I did :) I'll take a look at other stuff in your gallery when I get the time. Seems interesting.
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I'll do the same. :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:highfive:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
It is kind of cheesy, but I really like it. The repetition makes it sweet, and it's very heartfelt. The imagery is solid and the way you break the lines makes it seem very quiet and soft and musing - it's a velvet feeling of a tone, and I really like it. I think here Your body, it would make more grammatical sense to use a semicolon or period, but whatever you want to do is fine. Best of luck with Nathan! :)
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
thank you :)
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winterkate Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Writer
You're really welcome!
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
Brings back memories...
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Hopefully good ones?
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
Only when I lie to myself... which apparently is quite often.
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
:( What do you mean?
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
Just remembering a happier time, one that is long gone by now.
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
I'm sorry. :( I'm here if you ever need someone to talk to.
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Chandevi Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012
so sweetttt ..bravo u cud read my journal ...the one that says the day my heart forgets u,that wud be the last day of my life
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MebutREAlizeD Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE LOVE LOVE :)
LOVE THIS IT MADE ME SMILE AND NOT CRY :D
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Student Writer
thanks!
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MebutREAlizeD Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your sooooooooooooooo welcome! Love poems usually make me cry and feel empty but it made me feel like I was in love again.. :')
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Student Writer
yay! i'm glad!
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MebutREAlizeD Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Blindly-In-Love Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
so beautiful and sweet
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Writer
much thanks! :)
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Blindly-In-Love Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
welcome! :)
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MariposaWolf Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is super cute! :meow: ~KAWAII <3 I really love this ^^
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Writer
thank you!
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Highercode Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG ITS AMAZING AND BEUATIFUL I LOVE IT!!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Writer
HAHA THANK YOU!
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Highercode Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
YOUR WELCOME!
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PokeBW4Evr Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012
I think it's the sweetest lines I've ever read :iconcblushplz: I love it...I don't care if it's cheesy! I hope my future husband says things like this to me someday and actually means it~^^
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! It means a lot to me to hear that, truly. :D
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darknessoverme666 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
For my girlfriend,who asked me to read this: They why? Why aren't we together tonight? I feel the same way. then why
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Writer
:(
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's beautiful... I guess I like cheesy things, if that's cheesy, but it's in fact quite relatable. everyone feels this way about someone, of that I'm sure. great writing!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Student Writer
Bahah! Thank you! :)
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome!
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