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Listen:
I would be lying if I said that I didn't
Think of you every time I close my eyes,
That my mind doesn't wander to thoughts
Of you whenever I'm lonely,
That I don't whisper your name
While I sleep.

Truth be told, I am inevitably in love with you.
In a way that makes my heart skip a beat every time
I see you smile, every time I hear you laugh.
It's the fact that I still get butterflies whenever
You lightly whisper my name in my ear
That lets me know we are something more.

Your body,
Nothing has ever seemed so comforting than
The feeling of your arms wrapped around my waist.
I smile up to you as we share a brief connection of
Soft lips and grazing teeth that makes me swoon.

Listen:
Believe me when I say that I think of you
Every time I close my eyes,
That my mind always wanders to thoughts
Of you when I'm lonely,
That I whisper your name while I sleep.
Believe me when I say that I love you,
That there's nowhere I'd rather be
Than with you.
For Nathan. It's kinda cheesy, but what can I say? :)
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killzonekrissy Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
<3 this is so beautiful! :) and much happier this time! happy endings? maybe? Well-written, as usual! as my last 10 or so posts have all said, lol. I am really incredibly bowled over by your writing style and your blatant honesty. Awesome!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Student Writer
:D
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YogaTeacher Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know how you did it, but this flows so well and is smooth as chocolate pudding. I tend to skip over doting poems, but you opened this so daringly, and it rode the same wave right till the end. I think it's the simplicity; sometimes you just need straight up honesty in love, and it works.
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killzonekrissy Featured By Owner May 25, 2014
Agreed! :) you said it!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :D
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's kinda wonderful and I really like the way you start each stanza with, different and creative!
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love that final stanza... and the rest before it... They're not so cheesy as they are mesmerizing.

Because I have such... vivid... ideals when I think about what my dream girl is going to be. (rest assured, I don't do that often, and this is my first time reading this work :P I have no idea who you are and, no, I don't like stalking people... unless they're models, Madonna, thatguywiththeglasses.com, the snoopy experiment, and random stand-up comedians)

Its well written, the detailing :clap: its very well held; couldn't have put it better myself. Well done.
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :)
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